Question 70

The organizers of the fund-raiser expected that at least 500 people would attend, that the keynote speaker would be well received, and that they would raise twice the amount of money as they did last year.

This revision correctly uses parallel structure, ensuring that all components of the list are consistent in form. Each expected outcome is presented in a similar grammatical structure, which enhances clarity and coherence.

A) The organizers of the fund-raiser expected that at least 500 people would attend, that the keynote speaker would be well received, and that they would raise twice the amount of money as they did last year.

This option is correct because it maintains parallelism by using the phrase "that they would raise," which matches the structure of the preceding clauses. All parts of the expectation are introduced with "that," creating a uniform and grammatically correct list.

B) The organizers of the fund-raiser expected that at least 500 people would attend, that the keynote speaker would be well received, and raising twice the amount of money as they did last year.

This option is incorrect due to the lack of parallel structure. The phrase "raising twice the amount of money" does not match the earlier clauses, which all begin with "that." This inconsistency disrupts the sentence's flow and clarity.

C) The organizers of the fund-raiser expected that at least 500 people would attend, that the keynote speaker would be well received, and, consequently, to raise twice the amount of money as they did last year.

This option is incorrect as it introduces the phrase "to raise," which breaks the parallel structure established in the earlier parts of the sentence. The use of "consequently" also adds unnecessary complexity, detracting from the straightforward expectations presented.

D) The organizers of the fund-raiser expected that at least 500 people would attend; that the keynote speaker would be well received; and to raise twice the amount of money as they did last year.

This option is incorrect due to the use of semicolons and the phrase "to raise." The semicolons are unnecessary and disrupt the flow of the sentence, while "to raise" fails to maintain the parallel structure needed for clarity.

Conclusion

Option A is the only choice that maintains a consistent grammatical structure throughout the list of expectations, ensuring clarity and coherence. All other options fail due to inconsistencies in parallelism, which affects the overall readability and effectiveness of the sentence. Therefore, Option A is the best revision that corrects the sentence appropriately.